The Story Of The Past Three Years Of My Life

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My very first story that I wrote was about a girl who went to school. I was ten years old and have never been to a public school. When I posted the story I received tons of negative feedback and not even constructive criticism. This is what they told me.

 

"I honestly found nothing to like about this story."

 

"You shouldn't write about school if you've never been to one!"

 

"Why didn't you research a school then?"

 

This broke my heart. My very first story and they destroyed my dreams of being a writer. To distract myself I buried myself in things for a charity we work for. I had posters and flyers everywhere until my mom had me through them out because I was driving everyone nuts. And so I distracted myself with other things. Shows, books, anything I could think of. I was content to live with my head in the clouds. Alone. But then I had a dream that changed it all. I dreamed of myself, riding dragons. From that day forward I was not just content to stay in the clouds, now it's where I want to be. I learned everything I could and starting writing fan fiction. But no one even paid attention to those. No one wanted to start another argument. But in a desperate need for friends I enrolled in the school of dragons. I met many other Dragon Riders and started my own team. And this is how my first story that no one liked made me Shamara. However, despite my being happy, no one else liked Shamara. And so I am once again on a journey to find myself. But this time, I'm not alone.

 

Thank you fellow Dragon Riders, you saved my life.

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By MerricupNightFury^^

 

Star and all her dragons by FireNightStar^^
 
Name: Star The Navigator
 
Age: 18
 
Gender: Female
 
Appearance: Star has incredibly long Chestnut brown hair that when in a braid reaches down to her waist. Her skin is a light Carmel color and sure has a few freckles on the bridge if her nose. She has a slight scar across her left eye, but thankfully it does not affect her vision. She has amethyst purple eyes. 
By BrynneBjorrnson^^
 
By Fireflash^^
 
 
By BoomBox74^^
 
 
By FireNightStar^^
 
Designed by Arrowalker, Vanilia Viking and I. Drawn by Arrow
 
Winter
 
Her shirt is a long sleeve olive green shirt with gold borders. She wears a brown leather chest piece and coyote fur wrapping around her waist. Her boots, wristbands and cape are lined with coyote fur also. Her pants are brown with deep brown buckles and she keeps her messenger style bag with her at all times. 
 
Summer
 
When summer comes she changes to a green three quarter length sleeve shirt with gold borders. Her wristbands are no longer lined with fur, and so are her boots. She removes the fur from her waist and only wears her cloak on the colder days or when flying. 
 
Background: Star was 9 years old when she joined the school of dragons. 
 
Upon joining she made many friends. She Trained many dragons and because of her, Snow Wraiths were welcomed​into the school. But still, something was calling her. 
 
She went on many journeys​ to find what was calling her, but she never found it. She did find, however​, many different islands. Including, an island with a mountain in the middle. The mountain is hollow and covered in ice. Star decided it was the perfect place for all of her dragon companions.
 
 During the summer months Star stays on the islands to keep her ice dragons healthy. 
 
Personality: Star believes in following her heart more than anything. She sees the world at a different angle and because of that has traveled FAR beyond where any Viking has gone before. 
 
Star has not limited herself to Dragons. She is the proud trainer of a pack of wolves, a bear, a pod of Orcas, several birds and even a family of rabbits​!
 
As you might have guessed, star does things very differently.
 
Weapon: 
Drawn by Mechfighter^^
 
Other: Star has a necklace with the chiefs symbol ingraved on it. 
 
Dragons
 
Name: Skyfire
 
Species: Deadly Nadderhead
 
Gender: Female
 
Appearance: 
 
By FireNightStar^^
 
 
There was some confusion. She's red and not pink. Still an amazing edit!
 
By Rrepetti^^
 
By FloofQueen^^
 
Beautiful edit of Star (When she was younger) and Skyfire by Zitka!^^
 
Personalize: Skyfire does not tolerate sarcasm in the wrong moment. Nor does she allow games when they are on a mission. Wish she is given a task she will get it done THEN play. Unless of course someone throws something. Yay if her only weakness: Fetch. She cannot resist retrieving things. Which she gets made fun of by Star's other dragons for.
 
Favorite activity: Fetch
 
Biggest fear: Eels
 
Origin: Star received Skyfire as an egg when she first joined the school of dragons. 
 
 
Name: Polaris
 
Species: Snow Wraith
 
Gender: Male
 
Appearance: 
 
By BoomBox74^^
 
Base by MegaboltPheonix, Filled by Zitka^^
 
Personality: Polaris is playful as can be. Once you get to know him or he sees that Star trusts you, he is caring as can be. But before you​ gain his trust, he might come off as cold (Pun Intended) He is playfully competitive and will not refuse a competition. 
 
Favorite activity: Snowball Fight
 
Biggest fear: Cabbage
 
Origin: During one of Berk's coldest Winters​ travel to the wilderness was banned due to a report of seeing Snow Wraiths. Star followed her heart and trained one anyway and aided Hiccup in defending the School from dragon hunters. Since then Snow Wraiths have been welcomed into the school. 
 
 
Name: Wolf
 
Species: Woolly Howl
 
Gender: Male
 
Appearance:
By ScarfyWings^^
 
 
I think Wolf has been dreaming about Dragon Hunters again...
 
Doodle by Scarfywings animated by Mrizky2121^^
By FireNightStar^^
 
 
 By Arrowalker^^
 
By Laykary^^
 
 
Base by MegaboltPheonix, Filled by Zitka^^
 
 
 
Personality: Wolf is very protective of Star and the rest of her dragons. He is undyingly loyal to Star and overly protective. 
 
Favorite activity: Flying
 
Biggest fear: Dragon Hunters
 
Origin: Star found Wolf when she was in captivity in the dragon hunter's base. Wolf was trapped as well and had received a scar across his snout
 
Name: Journey
 
Species: Night Fury
 
Gender: Female
 
Appearance: 
By BoomBox74^^
 
By EmeraldDragon03^^
 
 
Bases by MegaboltPheonix, Filled by Zitka^^
 
Personality: Journey loves to annoy people more than anything. She will play jokes (that aren't​ really funny) as is sarcastic. 
 
She is incredibly competitive and (just because is bugs Skyfire) will challenge Polaris to races all the time. However, she will do most anything to save Star.
 
Favorite activity: Racing 
 
Biggest fear: Losing everyone she cares about​.
 
Origin: Star found Journey on one of her trips. This time she flew farther than ever before. After weeks of travel she found a large section of land. It was too big to be a island. Upon exploration she made a surprising discovery, and met Journey. 
 
 
                          The Leaders Of Vivvore...
 
 
 
By Boombox74^^
 
 
Name: Sonda
 
 
Species: Titan Sand Wraith
 
 
Gender: Male
 
 
Appearance: 
Base by MegaboltPheonix, Filled by BrynneBjorrnson^^
 
Personality: Sonda is short tempered and hot headed. He is stubborn and has a wry sense of humor. 
 
His firmness is good for some aspects of leading, but he can be to harsh, so he needs some others to help balance his personality.
 
 
Favorite activity: Sleeping
 
 
Biggest fear: Hurting Star and letting her down. 
 
 
Origin: Star met Sonda when he stole Moana the Tide Glider's eggs. Star recused the eggs and in the process befriended the Tide Glider. 
 
After a long adventure trying to find the answer to why Sonda was stealing her eggs, Star found out that his family died when he was young, and so he was lonely and jealous of Moana. Star invited him to Vivvore, where he grew to in unofficial leadership position. Star saw this and officially​ made him the leader.
 
 
 
Name: Moana 
 
 
Species: Tide Glider
 
 
Gender: Female
 
 
Appearance: 
Base by MegaboltPheonix, Filled by BrynneBjorrnson^^
 
 
Personality: Moana is compassionate and forgiving. Perfect to contrast Sonda's harshness, although occasionally they will clash. 
 
 
Favorite activity: Searching the depths of the ocean for treasures. 
 
 
Biggest fear: The dark
 
 
Origin: Star met Moana when Sonda stole her eggs. Star rescued the eggs and in the process earned her trust. 
 
 
 
Name: Pompeii
 
 
Species: Eruptadon
 
 
Gender: Female
 
 
Appearance:
Base by MegaboltPheonix, Filled by BrynneBjorrnson^^
 
 
Personality: Pompeii is a gentle giant but can also be firm. She does not find Sonda's sense of humor funny and will call him out on it. 
 
 
Favorite activity: Watching the hatchlings play
 
 
Biggest fear: Swimming
 
 
Origin: Star found Pompeii when she needed to fly into the depths of a volcano. None of her dragons could take that kind of heat, so Pompeii helped out.
 
 
 
 
Home Island
 
 
Name: Sivard 
 
 
Size: Small 3/10
 
 
Inhabitants: Omar, Carlil, Afnan, Lex, Star, Foxtrot, Azariah
 
 
Appearance:
 
 
Location: Not to far East of Berk
 
 
 
Name: Berk/The School
 
 
Size: Medium 7/10
 
 
Inhabitants: Too many to list
 
 
Appearance:
 
Berk^^
 
The School^^
 
Location: Um, Berk. 
 
 
Name: Dragons Edge
 
Size: Small 5/10
 
Inhabitants: The Dragon Riders, Star and any other students who have moved in
 
Appearance: 
 
Location: Outside the Archipelago
 
 
Name: Vivvore
 
Size: Large 9/10
 
Inhabitants: Star, Skyfire, Wolf, Polaris, Journey, and the rest of Star's dragons
 
Appearance: 
 
Location: Far South of Berk
 
 
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You are never alone here. We're are all here for you till the end. Your story was an inspiration to me, to never let others desecrate my dreams. So thank you, I'll start the day off with confidence, thanks to you. <3

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A wild post appeared!!!

I've read your first ever story, and honestly, for a 10 year old, it is still better than many of my friends could write today. My first ever story is CRIIINNNGEEE. So, you go! 

Plus, there was a few very good constructive criticism in those comments, and people also defended you from that one mean comment. You should look at the positive as well as the negitivite.

I do not read fanfics, mainly because I find them poorly written (although I have stumbled across a few very good fanfics in my life time) and I loose interest quickly. But, that is just me. So, you keep writing! I admire people who can start writing a story and actually hold interest. In m case; I am very good at writing but I quickly loose interest in the story. And when I loose interest, my writing turns sucky.

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Lynx

 Art done by DuskDayBreak

Lynx is rather bold and loud She is like Luna Lovegood in the sense that she is rather... odd. Loud, shameless and weird. She is more animal like than human. Lynx enjoys being flashy, showing off her skills. Once she sets her mind to something, she is natrually good at it. The problem is that she loses focus easy and doesn't like setting herself to standards. She craves adventure and can grow bored easily. She is particularly fast on her feet, but has low stamina levels. She is strong and tall for her age. Lynx is stubborn and laid-back most of the time. She does not like to follow orders. Some of her skills include: being double jointed, the ability of being able to climb almost any surface, very good at mimicking animal sounds and is EXTREMELY good at sneaking around. However, there is a side to Lynx that she does not show very often. She is very lazy and selfish at times, mainly because she lacks compassion twords humankind, caring more about dragons and animals more so than humans. This tendency causes her to be merciless in the face of battle.

 

 

 

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Lyra is very concealed and secretive. She rarely shows emotion and looks down on those who do. She is insanely obervative and could possibly rub off as edgy. Lyra can be rudely scarcastic, and may accidently hurt you. Don't expect remorse.  Though in fights, she doesn't appear to have a sense of honor and isn't afraid to fight dirty. She WILL kill. Lyra is willing to do anything to ensure her well being, and the well being of her mother. Which could be a weakness. she values her self preservation. She doesn't talk much either. She usually has her hood masking her pale delicate face and long hair. 

 

 

 

 

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Okay but I love this.

 

Shamara, you're awesome!

 

You see, I was a little like you when I was younger, except I only discovered writing and reading when I needed it the most. I spent years feeling like an oddball, left out. I'm naturally hyperactive but was never athletic like my friends. I didn't have interest in things like sports and I couldn't draw in the slightest. Not fitting in was never, ever fun, especially because I was so young and antisocial. It was like being a Mandalorian pacifist.

Later, however, I discovered reading and writing. Reading became my retreat and my only company. The characters I watched and read about were like the friends I wished I had, and then I started getting into writing. Now I had the freedom to not only read and watch the characters I held so dear, but create new characters- even worlds of my own! It helped me become the person I am. Though I'm not antisocial any longer, thanks to the meeting of my youth group and the realization I could be me, and not the person everyone wanted me to be, the reading and writing still stuck with me. The characters I loved as friends I still do.

 

I'm proud of you. You just gotta push past the hate and the criticism and be YOU, not what everyone thinks you should be. It's your writing, it's your story, and I'll support you every step of the way.

 

And that's all I have to say. Adios!

 

-Squiid

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