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NOTABLE ORIGINAL CHARACTERS 
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DRAGON AGE FRANCHISE

Rovena Cousland || Asiya || Arwen Lavellan || Imogen Trevelyan

 

 

Ailith Hawke (c Arrow)

 

ASSASSIN'S CREED: SYNDICATE

 

Rosie Catherine Chattaway (c Arrow)

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But you can reply to this thread.

 

If you haven't recieved your member card, don't panic. I'm in exam/end of essay season, so i can't make them until i'm done. I shall get the rest out after my last exam (Dec. 16!)

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Our second read is...

Crossroads: A New Beginning and a Forgotten Past

 

Due date for this read is January 24, 2017.

 

Discussion thread has been posted. Please leave your thoughts on there! If offering critique, please make sure it's constructive!

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There will be a link below of HTTYD 2 put to the song Centuries (Fall Out Boys). It's a condensed version of the whole movie and worth the watch.

Events!

Big Update Scavenger Hunt. Hints dropped daily.

Speed Stinger Race Track Idea!

Use this link to share your support and feedback! Let's make it possible to race on Speed Stingers!

 

Check out my fan fics

-Big Challenges (Finished. Please Comment, and read the sequel as well!)

-A Hidden Life (Sequel to Big Challenges.)

-Last and First

-First Generation (Daughter of Hiccup and Astrid)

-Great Ocean Gems

-A World of Discoveries

-Being Me

-The Black Cowl (Also a roleplay. PM me if you wish to join.)

-Twice the Twins, Twice the Fun

-The Dragonsblood Curse (With special thanks to Scensoredearchers) 

-First Friends 

-Last Remnant

-A Different Angle (A Big Hero 6 fan fic)

-Living a Lie 

-Middle (A Big Hero 6 Fan Fic)

-Welcome to Our Family 

-April Heist (A Big Hero 6 Fan Fic. Graphic Description. Reader's Discretion Advised.)

-A Cyber Kitty Named Wisdom (A Big Hero 6 Fan Fic)

- Gobber's Daughter 

- Adventurous Appreciation

- Bond Between

Please comment and give feedback on them. I value your opinion.

I'm moving some of my fan fictions over to Wattpad. Here's a link to my profile.

Also, if you like reading fan fiction. Please join the Fan Fiction Club

I also have a blog for my fan fic character. Link is at the bottom of my signature (Only available to those living in the United States and Canada. Sorry.)

My favorite reads:

Toothless' Kingdom (Dragonmic14), http://forum.schoolofdragons.com/content/toothlesss-kingdom

Hiccup and Astrid: A Family at Last! (NightFuryLover)

 

Also, if you'd like an uncensored version of my fanfictions, here's the link to Bond Between on Wattpad

 

Link I promised about the condensed version of HTTYD 2: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JJ8T2-p0W9s

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Spiker. (Whispering Death bouncie courtesy of Hattori!)

(Gronckle edits by Skypeoplephoenix.)

Here's a little side project I was almost finished. I just need to get the racing banners I recently lost due to a glitch back so I can complete it.

I recently created a blog for Nina, so if you're interested, here's the link: http://ninahaddocklife.blogspot.ca

Here are my adopted dragons.

Noche, from Smidvarg's Night Terrors. Thanks snowflake!

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 Siggy (Always) Under Construction

^ By the AMAZING TosiLohi! (I know right? Awesome! -squeel- )

CloudStream welcomes you to my siggy!

She protects the art here, so dont try and take anything! :) 

 

 

Thanks SOO much to Rebell for making my Profile Picture dragon edit!!!

 

Hello! I am jenniemkitty! I'm always open to chat, but may not get back to you super quickly. I am a bit of a goofball sometimes...so you have been warned. =-)

(warning:this siggy is long. Prepare yourselves.)

(another warning: bit of an art hoarder E)

 

 

My Q&A 

(click the words)

 

 

A little about me:

 

I am crazy about...

Everything Httyd of Course! - Httyd, Httyd 2, Rtte, SoD, and looking forawrd to HTTYD3! (I also play Rise of Berk) I would like to add that the Fanfiction 'A Matter of Perspective' by Squiid is really good you should read it :) (It's about Viggo's backstroy)

Harry Potter (i am completly nuts about this and have always been, and if you are too, I always love to talk to other Potterheads! =-) More about Harry potter stuff down lower, about half of the way down & at the bottom in the funny's)

Rangers Apprentice (not many people have heard about this book seiries, but it is Awesome! )

 

 

Pet Peves:

Judging other people

swearing

insulting (on purpose, sometimes people do it on accident, but as long as they apoligize they should be forgiven.)

Bugging

I may get mad if you do these. 

 

 

I'm a Mormon!

- questions and chatting are welcome

- Antagonizing me is not

- one important thing you should know is that there are many untrue rumors about Mormons on the internet.

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Im a part of...

 

Sunwing Voagers!

Thunderclan warriors!

 

My Viking OC

 

Name: Geveda

Apearence: scroll down a little and you'll see the artwork!

 Personality in a nutshell:

- friendly

- compasionate

-loyal, but it takes time for her to become loyal to others/trust others

- weird,but in a good way

- (sometimes strange) sense of humor

- avoids harm to others when possible

-  can be somewhat socially akward

- tends to talk to much 

Long version:

Personality: freindly, but socialy akward, loyal, compasionet, weird but in a good way, its part of her charm, with a sense of humor that sometimes leaves her standing akwardly when no one gets it. She is a very loyal person, and will not switch to the opsoing team, give away information, or help them if she is on the side she knows is good. However, while she is very loyal, it takes some time to for her to trust someone, and until then is figuring out if they are a good person to trust. There are reasons, however, that will get  her to break the rules, for example, going off to free trapped and caged dragons from dragon hunters despite being told not too (thats how she met CloudStream). She hates any kind of serious harm to people, which is why her arrows (more about them later on in siggy) only freeze the targets, not hurt. She also will try to get people to aviod injuring others when possible.

^ This awesome drawing was done by Fireflash! Thank you sooo much!

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^ By Alina Wildfire! Thank youuuuuu!

 

 

^ by Katarile! Thank you! Your art is awesome! =)

Main Weapon

A large bow with flightmare frost balls tipped on the end of her arrows. The balls are flightmare frost coated in some hard substance (differs depending on the purpose). When they hit something, they burst open and freeze whatever it is touching 

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Dragon Art!!!

 

CloudStream

My Woolly Howl (and my favorite, don't tell the others!)

  

 

 

 

          

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                                                                                                                                                            ^ Thanks so much to Arrowalker for this amazing dragon! ^^

 

 ^ This drawing is made by Alexadragonfire! Thank you!!! (skillz!)

Thanks SOOOO much to Rebell for making this! (also my profile pic)

An incredbile animation of CloudStream by TosiLohi! (-squeels- E-)

 

About CloudStream: She is protective, loyal, and compasionate. She thinks of others before herself. She never shoots to kill, only injure if needed to protect. Cloudstream rescued her rider, Geveda, when she was attemting to free dragons out of cages in a dragon hunter camp. She was rather closed up at first, but warmed up to Geveda after Geveda proved to her she was trustwothy, and they formed a close bond. She loves speed and feeling the wind in her face, and often does stunts with her rider (however she pushes the limits of how daring they are, as Geveda is more catious than CloudStream)She, liker her rider, is very loyal. Her main and first loyalty lies with Geveda. It takes time and good actions for her to trust others. She is very determind and has a strong willpower.

Weaknesses: Sometimes she doesnt listen and does something anyway if she is determind to do it, which gets them in trouble sometimes. She does not give up easily, which can be bad if there is a need to stop.

 

Savidi

The tripple strike

 ^ This adorable and amazing dragon was made by LissaFish! Thanks!

 

Starlight

The Night Fury

  ^ By DukinaDragon, thank you!! (congrats on ur first edit! =-)

 

 

FireLilly

The Fireworm Queen

 

 ^ Thanks so much BoomBox74! I love it!!! Amazing!  =-)

 

 

Elska

the Tripple Strike

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

^ This was drawn by Mystery-Venomnshift - thanks!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Thanks BoomBox74! She's adorable!

 

 

 

Dragon Screenshots

I decided to put in on a google docs instead. It was taking up to much space:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1U41ILztmSBKhJ_9rid6ntU9CIvr2fQeyKUv17c5vSNo/edit 

 

 

 

(I am a huge potter-head)

 

I am proud to be  Hufflepuff!

To Understand Hufflepuffs more, read this:

http://pottermore.wikia.com/wiki/Hufflepuff

 

My wand: 

Larch wood with a unicorn hair core, 13 ¾" and slightly yielding flexibility

My patronus: Dolphin

My Ilvermonery house: Thunderbird

 

 

 

 

THE FUNNIES:

moved to a google docs:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fJcvaIDSX0Ofe0oNd5a_hu3Rkdp9GJCOPfPT5FlKYxs/edit

ENJOY! =-)

 

 

 

-waves- THANKS FOR LOOKING THROUGH ALL OF THIS

CRAZINESS!! E) (you must have been boooored E)

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Welcome to JediwhorideDragons' Siggy!

 

 

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About me:

(feel free to skip this, I am not at all interesting)

Hi, I'm JediwhorideDragons, AKA EllietheSavage in game. While I don't play the game that often anymore, maybe only once or twice a week, I am almost always on the forums. Some of my hobbies are running, reading, writing, hiking, loving my dog, and counting down the miliseconds until the third movie comes out. As far as sports is concernd, I run cross country and track and field for my school. I definatley consider myself to be more of a writer than a drawer, though I rarley ever publish any of the things I write. My main fandom is How To Train Your Dragon, but I am also largely apart of the Star Wars and Stranger Things fandoms, as well as a few others, but not to such an extent. If you're wondering, yes I am that annoying girl who's in probably too many fandoms. And yes, I am also the one who writes a lot of the overly detailed and long villan conspiracy theories. At the moment, I'm still stuck in a Race to the Edge show hole I don't think I'll ever get out of... 

 

 

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 I AM ALWAYS WILLING TO COLLAB ON STORIES OR  TAKE WRTING REQUESTS! 

Links to my Stories: 

(sadly there's just one right now, though I'm always working on finishing up the mountain of stories I began but never ended)

"The Betrothal Gift"- A Hiccstrid One Shot

Link: http://forum.schoolofdragons.com/content/betrothal-gift-hiccstrid-one-shot 

Summary: Getting married has always been one of the many things a chief of Berk is expected to do. But what about future chiefs of Berk? Stoick comes to the edge to give Hiccup a very special coin in hopes of him one day getting betrothed only to find that his son already has a special someone in mind... Between Season Four and Season Five.

Warning: This story has a TON of spelling mistakes- I guess that's what happens when you type something in the dark late at night

 

I ALWAYS LOVE ADDING FRIENDS! MY BUDDY CODE IS E73RXG. I WOULD LOVE TO MEET UP ANY TIME IN THE GAME AND CHAT ABOUT RACE TO THE EDGE, HICCSTRID, HTTYD, OR ANYTHING ABOUT LIFE IN GENRAL!

 

About my Viking: 

Name: EllietheSavage

Age: 14

Gender: Female

Apperance: She has medium-length sandy blonde hair, which she always keeps up in a messy bun. Tan-ish skin, with sea green eyes and a scar on her left. Average height and weight, with a slightly muscular build. 

Personality: Very ambitious, driven, and tenacious, she sometimes comes across as brash to the students that don't know her well. Though she has a couragous streak, she is afraid of heights, which can be a problem when training dragons. Ultimatley kind hearted, she is a good student (when she wants to be) but is also impatient and can be short tempered. She likes most dragons and has formed many strong bonds while training at the school. 

Likes: Fireball Frenzy, Thunder Run Racing, certain courses in Flight School, finding/exploring glitches, and farming. 

Dislikes: The lab and Skulder (96.2% sure he's evil).

Level: 

1 Gold Star

Adventurer Level: 35

Fishing Level: 26 (RIP the time I actually went fishing) 

Farming Level: 27

 

Trophies: ~450 (Not the best at TRR [my fastest dragon is my Razorwhip], and I never see people to verse in FF)

 

My Dragons: 

Firehorn: Level 30 Rumbelhorn, rescued from Drago's Army (Male)

Firethorn: Level 30 M. Nightmare, hatched from the Hatchery (Female)

Dawnfire: Level 30 Groncicle, trained on Icestorm Island (Female)

OiOiOi: Level 30 M. Nightmare, prize box in Loki's Mirage (Male)

ChickenandMacey: Level 30 H. Zippleback, bought from Johann's trading post (Female)

SquittheLit: Level 17 Gronckle, prize box at the school (Male)

Snake Spine: Level 11 W. Death, rescued from the tunnels under Berk (Male)

Valkyrie: Level 11 Deadly Nadder, prize box on Icestorm Island (Female)

Tranchant Rouge (French name meaning Sharp Red): Level 4 Razorwhip, rescued from the Ship Graveyard (Female)

XxStickyVickyxX: Level 10 Death Song, trained on Melody Island (also thank you to typhoomarangmaster338 for this name, it made me laugh!) (Female) 

 

Art By Others: 

A drawing of my main battle/racing dragon, Tranchant Rouge, drawn by the FABULOUS Scalefeatherz!

A screen edit of Tranchant Rouge (sorry, I love this dragon) made by the super talented Blackwolfen!

 

CLAN:

I am a proud elder in the clan Hiccstrid Forever! We are an invite only clan, but anyone who ships this pairing is welcome, as long as you have a decent amount of trophies! (We've been recently getting alot of submissions with 0 trophies, and its really bringing down our rank, but if you really like Hiccstrid and just can't manage to get any trophies, you're still welcome!)

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We are a clan dedicated to the greatest OTP (and winner of 2017's best couple in fandom) ever, and "We fight together no matter what!" Our wonderful clan leader is Fasterid, and we have several amazing elders! If you ship it, and are looking for a clan, send in your submission; we'd love to add you!

Non-HTTYD Fandoms:

Star Wars: 

Favorite Movie: Hands down the Empire Strikes Back

Favorite Charecter: 1. Han Solo 2. Padme Amidala 3. Jyn Erso

Favorite Moment: "I love you" "I know" or Darth Vader becoming Anakin Skywalker again

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Stranger Things: 

Favorite Charecter: 1. Steve Harrington 2. Eleven 3. Erica

Favorite Moment: Any time Steve is a mom or any Mileven moment

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Others: 

  • Harry Potter (Proud to be a Ravenclaw)
  • Pirates of the Carribean
  • Lord of the Rings
  • Indiana Jones
  • Napolean Dynamite
  • The Emporers New Groove 

Ships/OTP's:

Hiccstrid!!! 

Favorite Part: This is such a hard choice, but I would have to go with either cthe end of "Blindsided" or the apology in "Mi Amore Wing" (I actually cried during this part)

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StoickxValka (Stakla) Honestly "For the dancing and the dreaming" is the best
 
HeatherxFishlegs (Heathlegs), even though I guess that's not a thing any more, thanks for that RTTE writers
 
SnotloutxMinden
 

Other Fandoms:

 

Star Wars-

HanxLeia

AnakinxPadme

ObiWanxSatine

AhsokaxLux

KyloRenxPainfulDeath

 

PotC-

WillxElizabeth

 

Stranger Things-

MikexEleven

Steve HarringtonxBeingtheactualbest

Jopper (JoycexHopper)

 

Other things I like: 

#viggoprotectionsquad

Fandom Conspiracy Theories

Rise of Berk-anyone else play?

TIMBERJACKS!!!!! (my life goal is to save up enough gems to get one in the game)
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THE END!

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Links to my chapters are below along with links to my other five fan-fics.

 

The Mystery of Shadow Mountain

Finally posted links to all chapters to all books in my signature.

Chapter 34 - Dragon Symbols

 

Chapter 35 - Water Chamber

The Mystery of Shadow Mountain, my sixth fan-fic in three years!  Updates every Friday Night!

 

Proud Leader and fellow member of:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Here are links to the chapters of my fan-fic, The Clue of the Missing Socks.

Chapters 1 and 2                         Chapter 3                                       Chapter 4

Chapter 5                                      Chapter 6                                        Chapter 7

Chapters 8 and 9                        Chapter 10                                     Chapter 11

Chapters 12 and 13                     Chapters 14, 15, and 16             Chapter 17

Chapter 18                                    Chapter 19                                      Chapter 20

Chapter 21 and 22                      Chapter 23                                     Chapter 24 and 25

Chapter 26 - There is a hidden surprise.  Can you find it?

Chapter 27                                   Chapter 28, Part 1                         Chapter 28, Part 2

Chapter 29                                   Chapter 30                                       Chapter 31

Chapter 32                                   Chapter 33                                       Chapter 34

Chapter 35                                   Chapter 36                                       Chapter 37

Chapter 38                                   Chapter 39                                       Chapter 40

Chapter 41                                   Chapter 42                                       Chapter 43

Chapter 44                                   Chapter 45, Parts 1 and 2

 

Here are links to my sequel fan-fic:

The Mysterious Frozen Fire

Chapter 1         Chapter 2         Chapter 3         Chapter 4         Chapter 5         Chapter 6

Chapter 7         Chapter 8         Chapter 9         Chapter 10       Chapter 11       Chapter 12

Chapter 13       Chapter 14       Chapter 15        Chapter 16       Chapter 17       Chapter 18  

Chapter 19       Chapter 20      Chapter 21        Chapter 22, Part 1       Chapter 22, Part 2 

Chapter 22, Part 3

Epilogue/Preview for my Third Story!

 

Here are links to my Tri-quel fan-fic:

Thoughts of Guilt

Chapters 1 and 2          Chapters 3 and 4          Chapter 5          Chapter 6          Chapter 7

Chapter 8          Chapter 9          Chapter 10          Chapter 11          Chapter 12, Part 1

Chapter 12, Part 2          Chapter 13         Chapter 14         Chapter 15         Chapter 16

Chapter 17 and 18         Chapter 19         Chapter 20         Chapter 21         Chapter 22

Chapter 23         Chapter 24         Chapter 25         Chapter 26         Chapter 27

Chapter 28         Chapter 29         Chapter 30         Chapter 31         Chapter 32

Chapter 33         Chapter 34         Chapter 35         Chapter 36 and 37

Chapter 38, Part 1         Chapter 39, Part 2         Chapter 40, Part 3         Chapter 41

Chapter 42, Parts 1 and 2         Chapter 43         Chapter 44

Chapter 45, Part 1         Chapter 45, Part 2

 

On the Edge of Mystery

Chapter 1          Chapter 2         Chapter 3        Chapters 4 & 5    Chapter 6, Parts 1 and 2   

Chapter 7          Chapter 8         Chapter 9            Chapter 10       Chapter 11        Chapter 12

Chapter 13        Chapter 14       Chapter 15          Chapter 16        Chapter 17       Chapter 18

Chapter 19        Chapter 20       Chapter 21          Chapter 22       Chapter 23      Chapter 24

Chapter 25        Chapter 26       Chapter 27         Chapter 28        Chapter 29 Parts 1 and 2 

Chapter 30       Chapter 31       Chapter 32 and 33                         Chapter 34 Parts 1 and 2 

Chapter 35 Part 1         Chapter 35 Part 2        Chapter 35 Part 3        Chapter 36

 

The Secret Symbol

Chapter 1    Chapter 2    Chapter 3    Chapter 4    Chapter 5

Chapter 6    Chapter 7     Chapter 8    Chapter 9    Chapter 10

Chapter 11    Chapter 12    Chapter 13    Chapter 14    Chapter 15

Chapter 16    Chapter 17    Chapter 18    Chapter 19    Chapter 20

Chapter 21   Chapter 22   Chapter 23   Chapter 24 and 25

Chapter 26    Chapter 27    Chapter 28    Chapter 29 and 30

Chapter 31    Chapter 32    Chapter 33    Chapter 34    Chapter 35

Chapter 36    Chapter 37    Chapter 38    Chapter 39

Chapter 40 and 41    Chapter 42    Chapter 43, 44, 45, and 46

 

The Legend of Shadow Mountain

Chapter 1    Chapter 2    Chapter 3    Chapter 4    Chapter 5

Chapter 6    Chapter 7    Chapter 8    Chapter 9    Chapter 10

Chapter 11    Chapter 12    Chapter 13    Chapter 14    Chapter 15

Chapter 16   Chapter 17    Chapter 18    Chapter 19    Chapter 20

Chapter 21    Chapter 22    Chapter 23    Chapter 24    Chapter 25

Chapter 26    Chapter 27    Chapter 28    Chapter 29    Chapter 30

Chapter 31    Chapter 32    Chapter 33    Chapter 34    Chapter 35

 

 

 

Pics done by me.  If you want to use them, give me credit please.

 

 

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New read posted! Happy reading! <3

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Wow, looks like Squiid left one last code in her signature. You have two clues...

 

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I have just finished the

I have just finished the girl's story, or at least all that has been written.

 

Having an interactive story like this is something I had never thought of previously.  Makes the story personalized to you while it might be different than someone else's experience.  That's the thing about writing and reading if you can get something out of doing either of those things every time you go back, that is gold.

 

I love the story and where it is headed.  I am very intrigued and cannot wait for further updates.

 

The critique that I have found is rather minor.  Because this is a work in progress, I would assume there is not much time to go back through and proofread.  I of all people understand this as I have this same problem.  Dropping words that while typing them you hear them, but your fingers don't actually type the word.  So some sentences can get rough.  Also, dropping pronouns or using the wrong pronoun.  These, in my opinion, do not take away from the story.  The fix would be to go back through and proofread/edit your story.  However, with me and how I write, I just want to get my ideas typed in first before I lose them.  Then after I am done, I stop and do other things.  Then it comes time to update my story and I continue on without going back and proofreading.

 

My constructive and major critique is that I sometimes don't know who is talking.  When a few lines of dialogue have been spoken without a mention of who exactly is speaking, it is difficult to understand what the writer wants to show who is talking.  Now, this does not mean you have to always have "he said," "she spoke," "they yelled," etc., but even in the dialogue itself this can be accomplished.  If before the conversation starts, it is already noted that Hiccup is talking to Astrid (just for an example), you could do this:

While the gang was in a circle, Hiccup asked Astrid, "So, what is your plan for Krogan?"

"Well, we don't know much about him, so I propose a recon mission."

"I like that idea." <<< Don't have to say who is talking as Hiccup was the last speaker before that of Astrid.  Whoever is the last one to speak besides the character who just spoke, you don't necessarily have to say who spoke.

"Propose?" interrupted Tuffnut.  "I thought the boy was supposed to propose to the girl.  Not the girl to the guy."  <<< Now if there is a change in a speaker from the two or more mentioned before than it would be best to indicate it as so.

Astrid looks both embarrassed and angry at Tuffnut, "I'll give you five good reasons why you should keep quiet."  Astrid held up her right hand in Tuffnut's face.  "One... Two... Three... Four... Five!" with each count she folds her fingers down to make a fist.

"I get those reasons all the time from Ruff," Tuff replies.  "But that has never stopped her from hitting me."

"You're right," Ruff said deviously.  "Those are good reasons."
Ruff proceeded to jump on her brother Tuff and they both started to fight each other.

"Ugg!" Astrid flopped her arms down in frustration.

 

I better stop while I'm ahead, or I may keep writing this.  XD

 

I found no major errors or anything along those lines in GamerKid's story.

 

I will read the boy's storyline soon.

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This kind of post should be posted on the Discussion Thread.