Original charater development help?

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Zeezur
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Im always horrible at placing these in the right forum bit oh well here it goes.

Ive been working on my dragon rider oc so far and heres what i got

Charles is my male viking, he works with drago but he had a different job. He helps the injured dragons they bring in or fought with until he was appointed dragon catching, he took the job and immediatley lost his eye from a gronkle but was saved by a change wing. He faces the problem of wether to leave or not with the fear of being killed by drago.

Miko(the changewing)- came from a dragon fighting ring before escaping, hes highly agressive but had soon earned charles trust. Charles usally keeps him away other dragons and unless they're meeting others he muzzles him. Hes very loyal and protective, he has a huge hate for night furies as they are stronger than him.

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     Interesting story. One

     Interesting story. One thing I have to ask is, are you looking for feedback? I can't tell if you just want us to read it or if you want feedback on how to make it better, or what?

 

  P.S. Your changewing's name, Miko, sounds cool. Nice pick on that.

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      Here are just a few things that I am:

  1. A procrastinator.
  2. Nice (mostly).
  3. Kind (don't listen to those that say otherwise).
  4. Adventurous.
  5. Lazy.
  6. A dreamer.
  7. And I'm slightly crazy.

     I've been around SoD for a long time. I think I was one of the first thousand to leave Berk and sail to the school. I'm happily part of the bold clann known as POTATO BROTHERS. I have over four-thousand trouphies, although, I don't like racing much. On the other hand, I'm a master farmer.

 

     I will spare you the details of how much I like HOW TO TRAIN YOUR DRAGON and just skip to my favorite things  about HOW TO TRAIN YOUR DRAGON. My favorite dragon would probably be the Terrible Terror. My favorite viking is Tuffnut. My favorite villain is actually not a villain any longer. It's Dagur.

 

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Now onto some random stuff. This part will grow over time.

 

Things I am a Fan of

 

How To Train Your Dragon

 

 

GODZILLA

 

TEETITANS

 

Quotes I love

 

"Once I set the sea alight with a single fiery breath....

Once I was so mighty that I thought my name was death....

Sing out loud until you're eaten, song of melancholy bliss....

For the mighty and the middling all shall come to THIS...."

The Green Death, How To Train Your Dragon: book 1. Cressida Cowell.

 

"WE WILL FIGHT THEM ON THE BEACHES! WE WILL FIGHT THEM IN THE BRACKEN! WE WILL FIGHT THEM IN THOSE BOGGY MARSHY BITS THAT ARE SO DIFFICULT TO WALK THROUGH WITHOUT LOSING YOUR SHOES! WE WILL NEVER SURRENDER!"

Stoick The Vast. How To Train Your Dragon: Book 5. Creessida Cowell.

 

"I sailed so far to be a King, but the time was never right.....

I lost my way on a stormy past, got wrecked in starless night....

But let my heart be wrecked by hurricanes and my ship by stormy weather....

I know I am a Hero...and a Hero is....FOREVER!

In another time, another place, I could have been a King....

But in my castle's ruined towers the lonely seabirds sing.....

I burned up my Tomorrows, I cannot go back ever....

But I am still a Hero....and a Hero is.......FOREVER!

Up with your sword and strike at the gale......

Ride the rough seas for those waves are your home......

Winters may freeze but our hearts do not fail.....

Heroes.......Hearts......FOREVER!

You are never alone if the sea is your friend......

Riding the waves of impossible quests.....

If it doesn't end well, then it isn't the end.....

A Hero.....Fights.....FOREVER!

The hero cares not for a wild winter's storm.....

For it carries him swift on the back of the wave.....

All may be lost and our hearts may be worn.....

BUT A HERO.....FIGHTS.....FOREVER!"

Grimbeard the Ghastly's Last Song. How To Train Your Dragon: Book 11 and 12. Cressida Cowell.

 

"That's how we're going to win. Not by fighting what we hate, but by saving what we love."

Rose. Star Wars: The Last Jedi.

 

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Bye for now!

 

 

FURTHER STUFF IS UNDER CONSTRUCTION 

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Zeezur
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Feedback. Sorry for the

Feedback.
Sorry for the confusion.

Zeezur
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Feedback. Sorry for the

Feedback.
Sorry for the confusion.

Zeezur
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Feedback.

(._. I dont know how it posted so many times. Sorry!)

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My opinion.

    Here's my opinions on Charles and Miko. (I know you never mentioned this being for a Fan Fic, but I wrote it in the same way as ideas for such a thing.)

 

  CHARLES: I like the idea of him working for the bad guys, its a good story point. Him heeling dragons captured is also a good way to have him start caring for dragons and understanding them more than mindless beasts. Losing an eye to a gronckle is a nice way to show that he isn't invinsable. Which eye did he lose and how did a gronckle take it. Tail bludgen? Fireball? I think that Charles wanting to escape Drago, but being afraid is a good plot point where charecter devolopment could come from.

 

  My main questions is why did Miko save Charles.With him being highly agressive and having a bad time with humans, what made him save Charles?

 

  MIKO: His past of being a fighter dragon is a nice background. How'd he escape from he ring? Also, why does he have a hate of Night Furies? Did he battle one in the ring once?

 

  That's all I got, but I hope it's helpful.

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thank you for the feedback

thank you for the feedback ive really been needing it