Me and my Dragon -Pt 1-

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This is my back story and how i trianed my dragon.

 

I was a little lass three to be exact and i remember being taken away from family and home in Berk. When i got taken away it was during a dragon attack by a large dragon. My Twin brother and i were sitting inside the house while our father was helping the village.

After what seemed like for ever the dragon took me to an island it seemed lonley and deserted, perfect for the large stormcutter to just kill me, but he didn't.

The next day came by and the dragon left. I never understood why, all i knew was that i was left with no protection, warmth or food and was all alone, Or was i...... 

That night i heard a Roar and i thought, ' He came back!' so i decided to go check it out, but what i found wasn't what i was expecting.

I was frozen in my tracks, i couldn't move because what i saw was heartbraking. I saw a mother dragon dying from battling a large Monterous Nightmare as she was trying to protect her baby, It was then i relised that the baby dragon and its dying mother were Night Furys.

 

To be continued.....

 

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You made a few mistakes-

First line 'trianed' is spelt wrong

First line 'i' should be a capital

Second line 'lass' should have a comma after it

Second line 'exact' needs a comma after it

Second line 'i' needs a capital

Third line should have a 'my' in it

 

I will continue editing it later.

 

General feed back-

It seems like an interesting story so far, and I can't wait to read the rest.

Just watch out for mistakes.

It could use a little more description. Eg. I heard a LOUD rawr.

 

I will continue editing this later

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*WORKING ON DRAGON BACKSTORIES*

 

Dragons-

Sandwraith- Nibbles

Nibbles is my first dragon that I rescued from a cage.

by LayKary

 

Groncicle- Vexy

I found Vexy on johann's ship. I helped her find her way back to ice storm island.

By ShiroKageFox

 

Nadder- Lulu

I got Lulu out of the hatchery's collection of eggs. 

 By FloofQueen

 

Death song- Melody

I rescued Melody from her mum's nest, after she was abandoned by her. 

 

Armorwing- Armor

I saved Armor from dragon hunters and she bonded with me. 

By FireNightSky

 

Smokebreath- Smog 

Smog is the second smoke breath I got. I won him in battle. 

 

Smokebreath- Skyfog

Skyfog is the first smokebreath I got. I also won her in battle.

By Nightfuryatom4

 

Whispering death- Groundwhisper

I got groundwhisper after finding her egg in the tunnels under Berk. 

 

Whispering death- Groundquake

I won groundquake in battle. 

 

Whispering death- Groundshake

I also won Groundshake in battle. 

 

Whispering death- GroundBurrow

I won GroundBurrow in battle.

 

•Whispering death- GroundSmasher

I won GroundSmasher in battle.

 

•Screaming death- Screech

I won Screech in battle. 

 

•Razorwhip- Cut

I found Cut's egg in an abandoned ship. 

 

Razorwhip- Snip

I won Snip in battle. 

By Vospader

 

Hotburple- Grunt

I won Grunt in battle. 

 

Snafflefang- Fangsnaffle

I won Fangsnaffle in battle. 

by dogloven

 

Snafflefang- Fangsnaffle Jr

I won fangsnaffle in battle.

By FroztWulf

 

Flightmare- Frightmare

I won Frightmare in battle. 

by Scarfywings (animated by mrizky)

 

Moldruffle- Mold

I won Mold in battle.

by Umbreon27

 

Speed stinger- Sting

I won sting in battle. 

By Okamisusi

 

Fireworm queen- Helios

I won Helios in battle. 

By Scarfywings

 

•Shockjaw- Helpfulwarrior

I won Helpful warrior in battle. I named her after one of my friends.

 

•Hobblegrunt- Wobbles

I won wobbles in battle.

 

Eruptadon- Flare

I needed help, and didn't have a dragon that could fly into the depths of a volcano, so I got Flare's help.

 

Singetail- Frizzle

I saved Fizzle from being auctioned by dragon hunters.

by Arrowalker

 

•Flamewhipper- Firelash

Firelash stowed away on my dragon, after my journey on impossible island.

 

Snowwraith- Blizzard

Blizzard is my racing dragon.

by TosiLohi

 

•Typhoomerang- BurntSwirl

I won BurntSwirl in battle.

 

•Stormcutter-

*CURRENTLY HATCHING*

 

 

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Hi guys!

The following part of my signature is currently under construction.

I plan on doing a lot more with the art I have drawn for me.

I am currently looking for people to draw my dragons, so if you think you can draw one, please DM me.

Thanks!

 

Adoptables-

*Im working on including names, etc

 

Scenseredshocked, my Shellfire, by Bluemoon20523

 

Hibiscus, my Sequin Wing, by Flowercrystal

 

Amethyst, a FriendFriend draggo, by 1flower

 

Stormrider, a Stormchaser, by Scarfywings

 

Sunfly, a Gardendigger, by Scarfywings

 

Galaxywhip, a Vesupa, by Bavelly

 

Peach, an Infertide, by Alicornbrodie

 

DeathSky, a baby nightfury, by Nightfuryatom4

 

Mysterystripes, a Marshtiger, by themasterplan47

 

PurpleFuzz, a Woolly Howl, by Wutend Bonfire

 

GreyShell, a Shelleye, by GoldenWraith

 

Issie, a Mountain Jackoat, by Scarfywings

 

Kiki, a Hyeagle owl, by Scarfywings

 

Ziggy, a Ratagator, by Scarfywings

 

Keja, a Foxret, by Scarfywings

 

Eza, an Impatypus, by Scarfywings

 

Rei, a dingorse, by ScarfyWings

 

Deathsky, and another nightfury, by Wutend Bonfire

 

GreySky, a Muddicry, by chameishida

 

VioletWraith, a White Mamba, by Megaboltphoenix

 

WinterBreeze, a Svalbard Howl, by Okamisusi

 

My triple stryke ref, by Wtend Bonfire

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Thank you to all the amazing artists who have done art for me!

 

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Just a question

Didn't you post a thread with the exact same thing just the other day? Just wondering. 

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yeah but i decided to put it

yeah but i decided to put it all into on thred/post

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Okay, desha vu was hitting me

Okay, desha vu was hitting me ha.rd. XD

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-pt 2-

As I stood there not knowing what to do, the mother Night Fury looked at me with pleading eyes, I knew i was the only one that could help. I slowly walked over to her and tried to calm her ' It's ok i'm going to try and help' I said. The mother knew she was dying and wanted me to look after her baby when she was gone, she looked at her baby, then looked at me as if trying to say ' Look after my baby for me.' 

I picked up the Baby Night Fury as best I could and took her to the cave around the corner and placed her in a blanket, I then walked back to the mother and said ' I'll take good care of her i promise.' That night the mother flew off the island as best she could so she could die.

The next morning rolled around and i woke up with the little dragon sleeping on me. Not long after i woke the baby did too, I descided to go get some food for the both of us and then i thought. " Hmmm I need to call you something.... how about Luna?" The little dragon started jumping up and down with excitement, " Ok then Luna that's what we'll call you.

After Brekfast we played games and had a little fun little did we know that we were bonding....

 

To Be Continued....

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-pt 2-

As I stood there not knowing what to do, the mother Night Fury looked at me with pleading eyes, I knew i was the only one that could help. I slowly walked over to her and tried to calm her ' It's ok i'm going to try and help' I said. The mother knew she was dying and wanted me to look after her baby when she was gone, she looked at her baby, then looked at me as if trying to say ' Look after my baby for me.' 

I picked up the Baby Night Fury as best I could and took her to the cave around the corner and placed her in a blanket, I then walked back to the mother and said ' I'll take good care of her i promise.' That night the mother flew off the island as best she could so she could die.

The next morning rolled around and i woke up with the little dragon sleeping on me. Not long after i woke the baby did too, I descided to go get some food for the both of us and then i thought. " Hmmm I need to call you something.... how about Luna?" The little dragon started jumping up and down with excitement, " Ok then Luna that's what we'll call you.

After Brekfast we played games and had a little fun little did we know that we were bonding....

 

To Be Continued....

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-pt 2-

As I stood there not knowing what to do, the mother Night Fury looked at me with pleading eyes, I knew i was the only one that could help. I slowly walked over to her and tried to calm her ' It's ok i'm going to try and help' I said. The mother knew she was dying and wanted me to look after her baby when she was gone, she looked at her baby, then looked at me as if trying to say ' Look after my baby for me.' 

I picked up the Baby Night Fury as best I could and took her to the cave around the corner and placed her in a blanket, I then walked back to the mother and said ' I'll take good care of her i promise.' That night the mother flew off the island as best she could so she could die.

The next morning rolled around and i woke up with the little dragon sleeping on me. Not long after i woke the baby did too, I descided to go get some food for the both of us and then i thought. " Hmmm I need to call you something.... how about Luna?" The little dragon started jumping up and down with excitement, " Ok then Luna that's what we'll call you.

After Brekfast we played games and had a little fun little did we know that we were bonding....

 

To Be Continued....

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Sorry

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-pt 3-

 

15 years have passed and Luna is a fully grown adult as well as I am. I have never celebrated my birthdays before but today is a special day, today I turn 18.

'Morning Luna!' I said as I got out of bed. ' Want to go for a ride today?' As soon a I asked Luna started jumping up and down and getting ready to go. ' Okay we'll leave soon i just need to see something first' I walked over to my bag and took out a note, a note writen by my mother. The note read.

 

' Dear my sweet Charlotte. I am sorry i can't be here for you and your brother, i wish i could i really do. I am sorry my Stormcutter took you, I was upset by not having you both here, These are direction to Berk go there when you are ready and at your own pace, ask for Stoick and Hiccup. 

Your loving mother Valka.

 

' I'm ready...'

 

To Be Continued.....

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Ehhhhh

I'm really not fond of OCs related to main characters, or with really rare things (like a nightfury). However, personal preferences aside, your story needs to be worked on some more.

 

Your grammar, puntuation and spelling is a bit off. Whilst it can be put down to various factors outside your control, it's generally considered polite to try to have it as best as it can be. If you need help with this, I'm willing to write it out correctly if you DM me, and I'm sure many other people here would be happy to help as well!

 

Right, here's some criticism about the actual story itself. For your first part, you completely missed out when the stormcutter went into their house. Furthermore, what happened to the stormcutter and Valka? Was she taken at the same time, but put on a different island? Did the dragon return for some reason?

 

I'm going to put this next point bluntly; that's not how 3-year olds act. 7-year olds, maybe, but 3-year olds? They would  not be able to survive in the wild at all. They aren't self-sufficient, and can barely look after themselves, let alone a baby night fury. They would also not be able to read or speak properly as they hadn't been taught it, and 15 years without being around other humans would make them act rather wild. Also, d.ead mother cliché!

 

How come Valka didn't come to help Charlotte at all? You haven't really covered that. She didn't go back to Berk because she thought that they still didn't like dragons, but she wouldn't have that sort of philosophy with a 3-year old daughter. 

 

 

 

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I agree with all of it.  I'd

I agree with all of it. 

I'd love to help as well! I'm not a great writer, but I need something to do sometimes just for the heck of it.

As Cresela said, your grammar and aspects related need work. 

And as I said in your first story thread, you need to capitalize your I's.

Thats one thing that bothers me to the extreme. XD