The Fanfic Without a Title (Halp! D;)

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Hey guys! ^^ So I'm currently writing a HTTYD fanfic which starts off in RTTE. It is about a girl named Astoria Hofferson who is the rebellious and underestimated little Sister of Astrid Hofferson. Here is the first chapter which I would need your help with rating it and giving it a title because I suck at these stuff >.< I actually planned on have the first chapter take place in HTTYD 2 but I felt that letting it move slowly would allow more room for character development and all.

 

So yeah, any properly thought out critics, feedback or suggestions would be greatly appreciated :3 And as well as a fitting title for those of you Creative people out there xD

 

 

https://www.quotev.com/story/11138867/Untitled

 

 
 
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In-game Name: kazxhtean(Kaz)

Main Dragon: Boltstrike(Skrill)

 

 

Don't come close if you can't handle the heat...

- Dragon & Trainer

i am strongly against hacking!

 

 

 

 

 

Nadders... BEAUTIFUL and FIERCE

 

 

                   

Credits:

Skrill Bouncie made by Rae Didgeridoo

Deadly Nadder bouncie made by Rae Didgeridoo.

S.O.D.A.H.T banner made by Chakuu.

Drawing of me and Peach made by Primus04

Drawing of me done by Pixel.

 

Special thanks to all that helped make this signature how it is now <3

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Not That Bad....

Honestly, it's pretty good, I'd continue reading this for sure. As for a title, I'd probably go with "Second Chance" Or "Night Of The Flightmare" Depending on the whole plot of the story.

 

I would probably explain more on how she left and when, so we know how much she knows about Hiccup's part take in the development of Berk before her departure, and how far her old acquaintances have changed and matured. Did she know they stopped hunting dragons, and trained them instead? or is this concept new to her? Plus, I would really like to see that reaction when she hears about this if she did know before this chapter took place.

 

Cause it seems like she left before Hiccup befriended Toothless, but she also stated Alvin has been giving her info on their development. So, I'm expecting shock from her every so often about the dragons, but I also see she understands things have changed.

 

I like the writing style though. It's really good, keep it up! :)

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Some information I'm willing to share about myself.....

 

Name?
 

Dylieh...

Was kinda obvious but :T
 

                                                                                           Age?

 

  17 :/

 

Main Dragon?

 

      A white and green titan sandwraith named Jewels..... who has a slight habit of dissappearing on me....

 

Favourite Colour?

 

      Green....... Neon green to be exact..... which looks really nice on white... and black......

 

Interests?

 

     Does Headphone junkie, concert crazy, digital artist, and occasional writer answer this?

 

Favourite area in SoD?

 

     If you're ever looking for me in game..... Just.... go to the highest spot of the map, and you might be

 

able to see me hiding on one of the ledges.......

 

Where I live?

    I love maple syrup on everything......... Does..... that give it away?

 

Current Clan?

     The Leader of Glass Wing Riders.........

 

Dragons?

 

No, I am not showing all my dragons here...... I have too many. I'll just make a video of them all later....

 

I'll post it to my youtube channel when completed.

 

 

But here's a pic of Jewels and my viking :P

https://demonguitars1214.deviantart.com/art/Killieh-and-Jewels-745389333

 

 

Hey, got instagram?
Go check out my SoD account.... I post fun game glitches and HTTYD/SOD art on there.

https://www.instagram.com/king_of_glitches1214/?hl=en

 

 

 

 

Yeah... I think that's it. Enjoy.

 

 

 

 

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Ooh, I absolutely love the

Ooh, I absolutely love the title, 'A Second Chance' as it pretty much leads Tori into a better route just because she chose to give her tribe a second chance. Pretty fitting. I might use it, thank you ^^

 

Well, she jumped from island to island, searching for an army that was against Berk, so obviously having teamed up with the Outcasts and Beserkers, she would have known about the dragons living in peace now but that didn't stop her from holding her grudge as she is a Viking AND a Hofferson. Reputation means everything to her and she didn't want to risk getting looked down on again. And also because of the fact that if she were to return, she feared for what her family would think of her and whether they would take her back, which is why she chose to keep away from them all those years.

 

And yup, she left Berk a few years before Hiccup befriended Toothless. She left at 8 years old to be exact, or more like she snuck out when the Outcasts came to visit. But yeah, the peace between the dragons and her tribe played a huge part in her forgiving her friends and Astrid :3

 

Thank you so much for the feedback! <33

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Well that's good. Yeah try to clarify that in the story, either with a flashback chapter or mini character told story, keep it descriptive so we understand, not a few sentence story or we'd be demanding a better explaintion XD I do like this idea though, can't wait to see more :)

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Spam >.<

Bumping this due to spam..

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Update

Changed title ~
https://www.quotev.com/story/11138867/A-Second-Chance

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Chapter 2

Chapter 2 of A Second Chance is out now ^^ 

Read it here -> https://www.quotev.com/story/11138867/A-Second-Chance/2

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Writer's Block >.>

So, I'm lacking some inspiration for the third chapter and I would definitely love to hear how you guys would like the story to go, so yeah. Any suggestions? :p